Narrative Essay
There once a man name Jemmy he sweats a lot because he work all day he always getting in to trouble.One day jemmy was at work and he was sweating and thirsty he needed some water but he didn't have any so he went to his friend Marlon and ask him for some but Marlon didn't have any so Jimmy hit Marlon whit a hammer and Marlon fell to the grown Marlon get up and punch Jemmy in his face and Jimmy take out a knife
and stab Marlon in his jest Marlon fell to grown. "oh no what have I don" sad Jimmy. There was blood all over the grown " I have to get out of her " sad Jimmy. A man saw Jimmy and take out his phone and call the police Jimmy didn't no what to do he get in to his car and went home to his wife ask him way are you home so early "one of the worker just died " sad Jimmy but he didn't tell her that that he killed hem.
Then a lot of police start surrounding the house. "come out of the house Jimmy" sad one of the police his wife sad what is going on "nothing" sad Jimmy.Then Jimmy run out side the police run after hem in to The bushes They search for hours but the police last sine of him. the rain was coming down "wear should I go" I can't go home. finally he reach a cave he went in the cave it was cold and dark but he couldn't go any wear else. so he stay in the cave for he stay in the cave for tow years.
He would wake up every morning thinking about his wife and asking god for forgiveness whole was asking god for forgiveness some thing popup in his head saying that you should killed your self and a nather say that you should go home to your wife. He thing that it was just a joke so he stud their for a moment and think about it he mead up his mine to go home to his wife. So he begin walking and the way he saw two rain deer and they look so happy together "I miss my wife so much" sad Jimmy soddenly he reach his house.
" The house look so mush better past the two years that I have gone" sad Jimmy he went to font door and knack his wife and sad Jimmy I miss you so much and" I don't want to lose you again " sad Jimmy's wife so they both went in side of the house Jimmy take's a shower and put on some close. Jimmy's wife sad you need a hear cut. So they went to the barber shop and Jimmy get a hear cut after they left the barber shop one of the barber call the police and tell them that Jimmy is back in town. After Jimmy get a hear cut Jimmy and his wife went to get pizza to eat whale they where at the restaurant the police was already at the house and they went home and opened the door the police sad don't move Jimmy tired to run but one of the police shot him in his gest and he fell to the ground his final words was "love you "he sad to his wife. that is way you most not give trouble else it will get you in trouble
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